I looked at Miss Baker,
wondering what it was she “got done.”
I enjoyed looking at her.
She was a slender,
small-breasted girl,
with an erect carriage,
which she accentuated by throwing her body backward at the shoulders
like a young cadet.
Her gray sun-strained eyes looked back at me with polite reciprocal
curiosity out of a wan,
charming,
discontented face.
It occurred to me now that I had seen her,
or a picture of her,
somewhere before.
You picked a good section of the book. I think you should've capitalized the beginning of every line.
ReplyDeletethank you for the critisim but it does add style to my poem and shows that it came straight from the book.
DeleteI like the line you picked because it describes how Ms. Baker looks and he goes into further dtetail on her.
ReplyDeletethank you i appereciate you for reading my poem. if there is anything that you want to tell me about it i would really appreciate it.
DeleteI like your poem but can you explain why you picked it? I think it goes well with the topic but what do you think?
ReplyDeletebecause it had a vocabulary word in it and it really made me think and remember the word. but i really liked how he described her thats why i picked it also.
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